The bath lifted up from the ground and floating on the water. Suddenly the room transformed into the ocean. All she could see was water and different kinds of sea creatures. Then she realized her togs turned into a beautiful saphire dress, with tiny white crystals on the shoulders. Then without warning a see- through dome shielded the top of the boat. It dived under the water.
Ahead she could see a glisening stone castle and the boat zoomed down to the gate of the castle.
What was she going to find.....To Be Continued!
Kia ora Rebecca,
ReplyDeletePobble has great images to use a writing starters. Once again you have used rich language especially your verbs, (headed, transformed, realised, shielded, zoomed) and descriptive phrases, (tiny, white crystals - glistening, stone castle).
You are using a range of punctuation to help the reader. I look forward to the next part.
Wow Rebecca!
ReplyDeleteYou have got me hook, line and sinker! I can't wait to read the next part, I'm wondering what will happen when Katie gets to the castle. Will she be crowned the queen, will she have to go on a quest, will she have to destroy a wicked sea creature. You have definitely captured my imagination!
Karen
Thanks for commenting
ReplyDeleteHi Rebecca, what a surprise Katie must have got when the room started filling up with water! I think it was a great idea to add the part about the bath turning into a submarine and zooming towards the underwater castle at the end because I want to know what happens next.
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