Thursday, 30 April 2020

My Pobble Story 4

Katie was panicking! What was she going to tell her Mum, Cassie. Shes never lied to her Mum before so she told her the truth. "Umm when I was in the bath, the room trasformed into the ocean and there was a palace, and I meet a lady, she said she was a little old and she was a queen, but she didn't  want to be queen anymore so she made me queen, but now I dont know if I can do all that queeny stuff I would rather be a princesess!" "OK" said her Mum very confused. "I'll show you tomorrow night" Katie begged "Ok fine, now go to bed, it's way past your bedtime". 

 Finally it was nightime the next day. Katie got on her togs and so did her Mum. They played in the bubbles for a long time. Katie was starting to get worried why was it not working. Wait! She forgot her tiara. She quickly got her tiara. Then the room was filling up with water. "It's working!" shouted Katie "What's happening!!" screamed Katie's Mum, and in seconds they were floating on the ocean. "Mum your dress is so pretty" and it was, it was gold with silver sparkles.  The bath tub was  turning into a submarine and they went to the palace door. When Katie opened the door of the submarine Katie and her Mum lite up and turned into mermaids. Katie's Mum had a yellow tail. "Woah" Katie's Mum looked very astonished. Katie knocked on the door, Adaline opened the door. "Hello Queen Katie" "Hi" Katie said "Adaline theres somthing I need to tell you" "Ok what is it" I don't think I can be a good Queen, so mabe my Mum could maybe be the new queen, and I could be the princess" "Thats a wonderful idea" "Mum how would you like to be the queen" "Really of corse but only if Katies the princess ok" Cassie and Adaline went of to do some queen training after a few hours. Cassie and Adaline came out a room "Alright see you tomorrow" "OK bye" and Katie and her Mum swam back into the submarinew. They zoomed back to the surface. They were back in the bath, that was so much fun and they both laughed. 
resource imageNow Katie and her mum have baths everynight!!   The End
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3 comments:

  1. Anonymous1 May 2020 at 12:09

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  2. Anonymous5 May 2020 at 10:25

    Katie's mum was very understanding and trusting Rebecca! Quite brave too, I think. I like the way you included Cassie in Katie's adventure because often the parents don't really know what's happening in adventure stories!
    Thanks Rebecca, Mrs Devlin

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  3. Anonymous7 May 2020 at 13:27

    Hi Rebecca, I really like the way you incorporated Katie's mum into the story. Adults sometimes tend to lose their imagination skills, but Cassie is right in there - Tiara and all - and I bet she looks forward to bath time now!
    In your story I liked the way you wrote Katie telling her Mum about what had happened, it is lots of quickfire things - bath, ocena, palace, lady, queen...that Katie remembers. This helps the reader picture what the scene might look like : )
    Thank you for sharing
    Miss J

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